Any advice appreciated

[jonnyp54]

Hi, I am just moving back to the UK after living and working abroad for 8 months with a prestigious financial advisory company. Due to an office closure I am moving back and need some help standing out!!

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Jon X
Phone Number
email address
Linkedin Address*

Career Objectives and Personal Profile:

A young finance professional, suited to an entry level role in a growing mid cap investment bank, where you can take full advantage of my record for bringing in new business and my passion for the financial markets.

Relevant Experience:

Financial Coordinator at *somewhere I wish I'd never gone!*

Successfully introduced over £10,000 per week worth of business on average to a number of top financial advisers from cold calls.
Worked with the 13th top consultant in the world from 2009 and the 30th top consultant for the 1st quarter 2010.
From March till June 2010 introduced in excess of £5.2 million of lump sum investment alone.
Built an extensive network within Cyprus of Introducers and referrers who drove my business development.
Successfully passed the benchmark qualification for the industry with the highest grade of any coordinator and higher than 3 of the consultants.
Regularly came in the top 3 in the market quizzes we had every monday
Cold called and organised 4 significant mutually beneficial arrangements with business partners around cyprus.
Built relationships with key personnel in international life companies such as Royal London 360 and Close Brothers Group.


Sales Associate at 3 Mobile
Worked 14 hour weeks during my last year of university alongside dissertation and exams.
Was regularly top sales associate despite studying at the same time.
Demonstrated profit maximisation on all customers, trebling my target for internet, insurance and accessory sales on most months.

Relevent Training:

2006 – 2010: Influence, persuasion, sales and questioning techniques.
Trading experience with the *a* Fund Trading Platform.

Qualifications:

CISI Introduction to Securities and Investments Award – 86%
CISI Certificate in Wealth Management – Pending
Affiliate member of Chartered Institute for Securites and Investments.
2006 - 2009 – Bsc in Biochemistry, University of Leeds (2.2)
2004 – 2006 – College, 3 A Levels, Biology ©, Chemistry ©, Classic (C) 2 AS Levels, Maths (B) and Performance Studies
2000 – 2004 – Grammar School for Boys – 11 GCSEs (3 A, 7 B, 1 C)

Key Skills

Business Development – Researching all avenues of lead generation – everywhere from social media and cold calling, developing my sales, communication and persuasion skills.

Working part time as a sales associate in a busy phone shop alongside final year exams and dissertations in Biochemistry improved my time management skills and deadline practises.

Networking and organising business events helped me understand how to increase interest in myself and the ideal way to increase business by word of mouth.

Trading mutual funds within my real money fund trading account improved my understanding of the financial markets as well as discussing investment strategies with clients and business partners.

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Thank you for your time and any advice you can give!

Kind Regards,

Jon

[cvsage]

Apologies, but at the moment this is rather like an American resume with a yucky first section:

"Career Objectives and Personal Profile:

A young finance professional, suited to an entry level role in a growing mid cap investment bank, where you can take full advantage of my record for bringing in new business and my passion for the financial markets..."


...and all too brief job description.

By improving both you could say far more about who you are, how you work, what difference you make, what you have achieved, what lasting value you are capable of adding.

Start with our advice sections. This "CV" is very average and could be almost anyone.

[jonnyp54]

Thanks, I appreciate the advice.

I had used a template from a seemingly prestigious banking and finance recruitment company but must admit I feel like I'm going out on a limb!!

Was trying to make it as concise as possible but have since added in my other sales related jobs just as face to face fundraising and a B2B sales job I worked in.

I'll be working on it today and look forward to posting an improved version soon.

[monikasmith]

Name, contact information, objective then write down about your education and trainings. Then mention your experience. You can use bullets to list them down.

[jonnyp54]

Hi Monica,

The advice I had previously was the avoid the 'list style' CV. And also I will applying for jobs where they will be wanting 2.1 gradutes and I only got a 2.2, so I don't want to make it to easy for them to reject me on that grounds!!

Is the general consensus education and qualifications before or after previous employment details?

Thanks